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The world is vast, I\'m searching fast, at last I finally see,
There\'s plenty of fish in the ocean, but not a single fish for me.
For I have special feelings for the one that can\'t be caught,
She will never take my bait and her love cannot be bought.

As time goes by, I wonder why, my cry will not be heard,
It seems no-one understands me, but I\'m truthful to my word.
I know what they say, they think it\'s a crush, but I feel it deep inside,
And these feelings are forever, they will not change like the tide.

To call her name, ignite the flame, and aim to be as one,
my life fulfilled, our love would shine, as brightly as the sun.
But wishful thinking lurks, when my needs are overdue,
I\'ll be lonely all my life, because dreams do not come true.
©2003-2010 ~8thdayoftheweek
:icon8thdayoftheweek:

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Hi,
My first submission here, but something I wrote a while back.
I wrote it when I was feeling sad and lonely.
I have no idea if anyone will like the stuff I will submit, (it probably sucks, I dunno) and I have seen that rhyming poetry is not that well thought of either but I signed up here to join in, share some stuff and to have fun hopefully.

[edit] had to up it again because in trying to change the image, I wrecked it all...thanks for previous comments, I'm sorry to lose them...

Cheers

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:iconkingcobra:
The sad, depressing thoughts...You must have been hurting when you made this, or even before you made this.

I made a couple of poems in situations such as these. I've been through them as well, but not as public as you have made this.

As for rhyming poetry not well thought up, I can think of a few "bands"...keep posting.
:icon8thdayoftheweek:
I'm not sure what you meant of my comment, but what I meant by
" and I have seen that rhyming poetry is not that well thought of either" is that I have seen where rhyming poetry is usually not regarded that highly (not well thought of), I didnt mean "not well thought 'up' " as in not well rhymed or anything.

Cheers :) (Smile)
:iconkingcobra:
No, I hear ya. There are rhymes, but they do not make sense or have any real meaning. I did not mean to confuse the two words with my post.
:icon8thdayoftheweek:
" but they do not make sense or have any real meaning"

For me they do.
Each to their own...

Thanks for your time.
:iconstrange:
I agree, each to thier own
This poem is actually really cool

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"But I, being poor, have only my dreams;
I have spread my dreams under your feet;
Tread softly because you tread on my dreams."

- W.B.Yeats
:icondazedandconfused:
That's a great poem, it shows how you were feeling at the time. I can relate, you know. I really like it, and I think rhyming gives poetry a certain artistic feel. Keep posting, I like it!

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Either write things worth reading or do things worth writing
:iconvikki:
wow...you show some pretty strong feelings, very nicely portrayed! beautifully written!

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:iconeuphoria-angel:
Wow, I really like your work! I need to put you on my deviant watch!

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:iconlenaizmymom:
this is nice :) (Smile) i like the way you rhymed the whole thing and i understand how you feel. i especially liked the two last lines


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